Okay, guys, I am attempting to write, formulate and create a Kyman Fanfiction. I am having a lot of trouble with formulating the jumpstart to their initial feelings for each other. (Romantic, lustful, or otherwise) I really need help and I would really love your feedback.

Is the perspective constant enough?
Are the sentences too long?
Is anyone out of character?

I really want to make the characters as accurate the show as possible, but also make their mutual attraction process logical. As a love/hate relationship and, especially being Kyle and Cartman, this is VERY difficult to do.

I don't want to make Cartman out to be too nice in the beginning and I also don't want Kyle to trust Cartman too easily. Because it just wouldn't be Cartman or Kyle-like.

So I REQUIRE your assistance.

I don't have anything published on devintart or fanfiction.net yet,
but please comment if you are willing to assist me in achieving my goals.